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I watched my moon with abandon,
Hidden by the shadows of our lives;
A blackened hole in space and time:
No light could shine upon our love
That night.

“Would you lie for me?”
She etched the words
Into my skin with pallid lips.

“Would you die for me?”
She asked me, as I stared
Into my own lunar eclipse.

Her moon was pale and warm that night
Shining, bright upon our naked forms;
Twin snakes dancing in our shadows wake,
And raging for the freedom to feel again.

My moon lay hidden with disease
Above the breeze which called us together;
Wrapped within the incest
Of the shadows
Of a world gone mad.

“Will you dream of me?”
In the shadow which was our love.

“Will you stay here for me?”
Last words, my eloquent dove.

I saw the stars falling, and I believe
My moon, too, upon the leaves has fallen
As I stare
Into the eclipse of my scantly beating heart.

“You're falling apart...”
Her pale eyes reflected with scorn
The sullen depths of my barren sky.

As the words sunk in
Shaping my future dreams,
As my moon emerged
A metallic shard gleams,
As my heart exploded,
Silent screams imploded,
And subtle pieces of the moon fell gently upon my back.
©2005-2009 ~a-stray-child
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thanks to =Awi for suggestions

based on --> [link] for the ~Emotional-Writings picture poetry contest --> [link]

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:iconrepus:
very nice imagery, val. i like the darkness of this very much, though i feel there is more to this than i am understanding. either way, i still really like it...;)

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...which do you choose (pick one)
:icona-stray-child:
naw i think it's pretty straightforward :)
thanks alot

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make me sad, make me mad, make me feel alright?
:iconawi:
i dunno im gonna go with =repus it seems like there is something hidden ... then again maybe we're just used to the way you write :p

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:D

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make me sad, make me mad, make me feel alright?
:iconmoriloth:
:) very foreboding, mystical imagery. nice

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:iconshadowed-angel:
I'm voting for this one. The intense mystery captured me and the vivid imagry sent my mind wild.

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Powerful.:)

Good luck with the contest!:aww:

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